Panic. The landing was perfectly on schedule. Yet the feelings welled up from his very core. Spreading from the pit of his stomach. Upwards and outwards right to the tips of his fingers and toes. The skin on the back of his neck. His hair stood on end. His mouth was dry.
The flight itself was uneventful. Started on time. No delays. Nothing unforseen to interfere with the journey. The landing was a little rough, but that was not the cause of his anxiety. The door was now open. He knew that finally he had arrived. Taking a deep breath he descended the ladder. Terror turned to elation as he uttered the words:
“That’s one small step for man........
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Written for trifecta writing challenge: incorporating the word "flight"
perfect! I love unexpected.......
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A trifecta: the first comment to my first trifecta entry and my first post.
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Amazingly told. My stomach would have been in knots.
ReplyDeleteYikes! Big, big step and unexpected here. The ultimate adventure...
ReplyDeleteGreat narrative and surprise ending. I thougt the reference to the "ladder" was peculiar, but I never guessed what you were wrting about!
ReplyDeleteGreat story telling here. The ending done perfectly.
ReplyDeletenice end! definently didn't expect it!
ReplyDeleteI didn't expect the ending, but it makes the whole piece make more sense. I'd definitely have my heart in my throat if I was doing something that grand!
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ReplyDeleteMy only critique is that first paragraph is very choppy, the sentences don't feel quite complete.
Nice. I agree with Carrie with the slightly choppy feeling of the first paragraph. That being said, I love the unexpected ending. A very nice piece!
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ReplyDeleteI can only imagine the feelings that went along with that historical flight. What an experience to have had.
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Great surprise ending.
ReplyDeleteNice! I wonder if that's how he really felt.
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