Friday 26 October 2012

Sixteen Years


He entered through the unlocked door. She was not home. The money they had put away together had given her this beautiful house. She had created a new life. A life with someone else, not with him. It had taken some doing, finding her. Time changes both appearance and memory. She had a new name now, but it was definitely her. Some things never change.

They had done everything together. Even when it ended, they would stick together. How wrong had he been. She got witness protection, access to the money, In return, he got sixteen years.

He was back.

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100 words ritten for Friday Fictioneers using the above picture as a prompt.

15 comments:

  1. Well, that was eerie. I wonder what he did to get 16 years.

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  2. Hi Rog,
    The old love getting out of prison is a great premise, menacing and fraught with danger. Good scenario. Ron

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  3. Ok, someone call 911 or this isn't going to end well! Nice story, it sucked me in and left me worried over her.

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  4. Very good at making us pull for the as yet unnamed and unseen protagonist!

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  5. Oh my...someone might be in trouble. Nice

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  6. Great sense of foreboding here ... that guy is seriously upset with her. Nicely done.

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  7. A dish best eaten cold? Oh, man, is she going to be surprised. Great story. Thanks for the ride.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  8. I don't think this the The Homecoming in the Waltons sense. I want to find her and tell her not to go home quite yet. Sinister build. Nice job.

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  9. Very nicely done. I love the ending! Promising lots of action in the next episode :-0

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  10. It is not going to be a good day!! You left me wanting to know more, both what had already happened and what would happen next. Well, maybe only the first. I can imagine the second.

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  11. This could turn into something very interesting. Very nice mix of emotions. I just don't know who is right, I want to know the girl's part of the story!
    Very good work, I hope you expand on this!

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  12. what will satisfy him? If she went witness protection, that means he turned against her. He doesn't sound evil, but maybe it is a thin line between that and violence.

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  13. Interesting. He's back. For revenge? Very interesting, indeed.

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  14. How Scary. He's back..I gather it means he went to prison and is now out on parole. The gov. didn't conceal her very well bec. he found her. Confused however...I see no connection with the photo... unless I missed something?

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  15. I loved this! I could follow his progress in the house... would like to see more.

    here's mine...http://tedstrutz.com/2012/10/25/displaced/

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