Saturday, 12 January 2013

Forever

Hand in hand, the lovers ran. As fast as they could, knowing this was their only escape.

Falling in love left her no choice. Fearing the anger of her father, Penelope knew she must run away before he found out.

Although it pained to leave her father, mother and sisters, being with her love outweighed all else.

But Zeus had spotted them. They could no longer be trusted. As punishment, and, a signal to her sisters Penelope would be frozen. No longer taking human form, she was left with her lover, a monument, and warning to the remaining nine muses.
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Written for Friday Fictioneers.

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/friday-fictioneers-2/

Based on on the prompt at:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2013/01/09/11-january-2013/







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17 comments:

  1. Sandra Crook12 January 2013 at 02:04

    An original take on the prompt. Nicely done.

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    1. janet12 January 2013 at 06:42

      I agree. The music of the gods is not always harmonic!!

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    2. Anonymous12 January 2013 at 22:20

      Muses, yes! This works well with the prompt. It seems we're getting a lot of poetic-type stuff with this, which is why I have enjoyed reading everyone's stories ... and yours. Nice work!

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  2. Anonymous12 January 2013 at 10:35

    A very creative interpretation of the prompt, and very strong imagery...the hotblooded lovers turned to wooden instruments!

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  3. Anonymous12 January 2013 at 13:58

    This is a long way from the prompt - an impressive show of inspiration. Did you mean "It pained *her*"?

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    1. BetaRules13 January 2013 at 00:20

      Thanks, and yes her should be inserted (at the expense of word count). Perhaps ...although very painful...... Would be better. Thoughts??

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  4. Anonymous12 January 2013 at 15:44

    A nice mythological story. I liked the way it seemed at first just like a love story, and evolved into a classic tale of the gods. Ron

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  5. billgncs12 January 2013 at 17:36

    I really enjoyed this

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  6. Anonymous12 January 2013 at 22:00

    i'm absolutely cray cray over Greek mythology.. how you thought of this.. brilliant!

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  7. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields12 January 2013 at 22:05

    Dear Roger,
    Now that was original. Good job and thanks for the photo. As you can see it's garnered some creative responses.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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  8. BetaRules13 January 2013 at 00:21

    I'm glad it has worked, and thanks for facilitating.

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  9. Douglas MacIlroy13 January 2013 at 17:46

    Dear Roger,

    Zeus, eh? I love it when older gods rear their hoary heads and send messages to the mortals. Keeps the newer ones on their toes.

    Thanks for the great photo. Worked for me.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  10. brudberg13 January 2013 at 19:22

    Brilliant.

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  11. tedstrutz14 January 2013 at 09:24

    So that's why Penelope didn't make the cut. 'They couldn't be trusted'... Don't mess with Zeus! Good story.

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  12. train-whistle14 January 2013 at 10:07

    oh, very nice this one. I like your interpretation of the prompt.

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  13. Anonymous15 January 2013 at 07:28

    Very cool. I like the fact that you turned to Greek mythology for this one.

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  14. Anonymous17 January 2013 at 01:16

    aha! a good surprise ending. suggestion: "As punishment, and, a signal to her sisters Penelope would be frozen." no comma after "and" and put a comma after "sisters."

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